1) The pitch
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch
I received two comments on my second elevator pitch, both were positive and stated that they were impressed with my pitch. The first comment discussed my opening line and how she liked how I referenced a street she was familiar with in order to relate to my audience. The second comment discussed how she could tell I took my feedback and made the appropriate changes in order to better my elevator pitch as a whole. The one critique I did receive was to make better eye contact with the camera throughout the pitch.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
Based on the feedback I received, I kept a similar structure to my pitch but changed a few details. Also, this time I really focused on making eye contact with the camera or my "audience" in order to seem more engaged. Since this was my third time performing this pitch, I felt very comfortable with the pitch and had my speech almost memorized. Practicing this speech throughout the course, I was able to see how much I improved over the semester.
Hi Andrea! You did great on this pitch and I am happy to see that you took the comments you received in a constructive way to improve your pitch. The idea you presented was again clear and concise, which allows those reviewing your pitch to get the most out of the short amount of time you are able to speak. I like that you included the fact of living in this "impatient generation", which identifies the issue you are solving.
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ReplyDeleteI think you did an amazing job with this third and final pitch. I can tell that you took your criticism and really improved on the overall quality of the pitch. You had a very inviting, yet informative tone that kept the watcher engaged and wanting to hear what you have to say. I also think that incorporating a street name that is familiar to UF students was a great strategy to use in your first line. Great well-rounded pitch!
Hi Andrea! You definitely took the critiques from others and applied it into your third pitch which definitely paid off! I thought that you had a great tone throughout the pitch, which kept me engaged. Your pitch provided viewers with enough information without it being too cluttered which is extremely hard to do. I have no critiques as this was a great post!
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