1. The Pitch
Elevator Pitch Video
2. Feedback Reflection
I only received one comment on my previous elevator pitch, however, the suggestion given to me was to use more hand gestures as I gave my proposal. Even though I only received one formal comment, I watched back my original post and changed the content of the pitch slightly to make it better. Also, there were times where I said words such as "like", "um", and "and" when I should have just taken a breath or pause. Obviously, these issues can be resolved by practicing my pitch more but I really tried to focus more on my words this pitch and not speaking too fast.
3. Changes based on feedback
After reviewing my previous elevator pitch, I added more hand gestures and tried not to look as stiff in this elevator pitch in order to make it more engaging. As I previously mentioned, I tried to not use as many filler words for this pitch in order to make it sound smoother and more rehearsed. However, there is fine line between sounding too rehearsed and sounding like this is your first time practicing. Keeping my pitch concise but engaging was my ultimate goal for Elevator Pitch No. 2
Hi Andrea! Your pitch was great and the timing was just right. You definitely caught my attention in the beginning and by using a local familiar street as your example, it helps draw a clear picture for those listening. Your content was perfect and makes all those listening for the first time understand you plan exactly. I do not think of much to change, it was very good.
ReplyDeleteHi Andie!
ReplyDeleteGreat pitch! I think you succeeded in fixing the parts that you were concerned about like adding hand gestures and staying more comfortable while presenting. Your tone and open body language really allowed for the watcher to remain engaged throughout the duration of your pitch which was great. I think your content was structured perfectly and the only thing that you could tweak up a little was keeping eye contact with the camera or the "watcher" throughout the pitch. Keep doing great!